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Review:academica says:
Hi there! Here from Slytherin Review Tag :)

I love THG and HP, obviously, which is why I picked this one. I thought you did a really good job of showing Lily's emotions. Are you considering having Albus narrate some of the later chapters? Just an idea -- might be neat to have them switch off.

My first thought was how sad it was that the two children chosen were from the same family. It seems like the Potters have already endured a lot of tragedy in this piece, which I imagine will bring them closer together throughout the games. I also thought the little twists you came up with for the games this year were really cruel and fit in well with how the Capitol was portrayed in THG. Nicely done there.

Two tiny critiques. One, the spacing here was a little distracting. I would suggest using the simple editor or editing the excess space out next time you post a chapter. The other thing is that I noticed some fragmented sentences and other mistakes, things that a beta could probably help you clear up. Just an idea to make things flow a bit more smoothly.

I think you've got a great start here! Good work! :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Yes I'll have a few chapters in Albus' POV, but most'll stay in Lily's :D
I know! :'( Poor Potters... Oh and I can't be credited for the THG twist^^ Katniss mentioned in Catching Fire that in the twenty-fifth Hunger Games, they held a vote for the Tributes, it's in fact what inspired me this fic xD I just added that thing where they couldn't vonlunteer because I thought it made more sense^^

Yes I know, the spacing seems to be a problem in a lot of my fics. I write them on word with a regular spacing but then as soon as I put it on here, a bunch of space just pops out :/

Oh and I'll try to fix it myself, though I think I might actually find a beta... My grammar isn't so great.. :/

Thanks!! :D

xx

-June

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