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Review:academica says:
Hi there! Here from review tag :)

First off, I loved your characterization of Draco. It's kind of eerie, because you write him in much the same way that I would post-war. I thought your details went a long way in showing just how depressed and broken he is, and how much he's changed, how much older he seems to have gotten within only a short expanse of time. I especially liked the way things that used to amuse and satisfy him no longer did so, and how he was shocked by how much his appearance had deteriorated. Those details, like I said, really made this a realistic portrayal of a depressed man for me (and I'm a mental health professional).

One tiny tweak that I would make, if I were you -- near the beginning, where you mention that Draco thought about his mother and how things had changed since Crabbe's death, it seems a little awkward to have that thought in third person. I would either make it first person, or un-italicize it and just leave it in there as part of the background for the scene.

Your imagery was great, and I felt like I was easily able to follow Draco on his journey. I'm interested to see what will happen next with Draco and his mother. I didn't see any big problems with spelling and grammar here, so I wouldn't worry too much about that. I think you did a great job! :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hi there!

Okay I am speechless. This is some serious praise for this chapter and I just want to say thank you. I tried really hard to make Draco post war as believable as I could. That is weird that I write him the same why that you would. I am glad that you are able to understand what it is that I am trying to do with him and that it comes across easily. He still has his moments and that is mostly because he's Draco being Draco, but I feel like he has lost so much that somewhere deep inside is someone who really wants to change.

Yeah...about that I never meant to put it in italics. Thanks for pointing it out though.

I am glad that you liked it and the imagery. I worked really hard on it. Yay! No big problems with spelling or grammar! I always worry about this part so now I feel more relaxed.

I am glad that you're excited to find out more. Thanks again for reading and reviewing!! =)

-SR17


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