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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
This is another excellent chapter! It very neatly continues on from the previous ones, constantly building the plot, even after the excitement of last chapter. You never run out of suspense for us readers, keeping up the tension perfectly with a good measure of action, bits of humour, and cliffhangers that are obviously planned out with care. Even if you haven't actually planned out the story so elaborately, it feels that way.

I'm not surprised that Anastasia discovered the breach so quickly - she's very efficient in her work, and while that's a great strength, I wonder whether it's also a weakness. She's too careful, too good at her job - but then again, we haven't seen her lose her temper yet, not completely. If she does lose it, I definitely fear for anyone who gets in her way. It's almost comical how she's the "brains of the outfit", literally surrounded by idiots. It says a lot about the kind of people Riddle chose as his followers - the fanatics and weak-minded; Riddle definitely did not want any competition.

It doesn't bode well for Moody and Duncan if they're stuck out there for a week. I'm not sure whether Anastasia will go after them, but if she does, she's the type would find them somehow. :P I think I like her too much - there's no clear line between heroes and villains in this story, which makes it more interesting and complex to read. People on both sides of this war are working for a greater goal... and meanwhile Riddle's just doing his own thing.

There were two typos I noticed in the final section of this chapter, one being "ordinarily" rather than "ordinary", the other being a missing word in the sentence "secrets that are in no position to have to know about" - is it "you are", perhaps? Or "we are"? Those are the only things I found to critique. Otherwise, it was a fantastic read and I'm once again looking forward to more of this story! :)

Author's Response: Yay another review! It's such a great feeling when people who have been reading all along want to continue!

I sort of planned out an outline of the major plot events beforehand, but the smaller details I'm kind of making up as I go along, so its been a challenge for consistency and contuinity, but I'm glad to hear it seems to be working so far.

I't always seems to happen in many stories that the evil villain's henchmen are total idiots, and with some one like Riddle, I think it makes sense that he wouldn't want people who might think for themselves. Anastasia is definitely on top of game right now. i don't want to give too much away, but she might have some interesting twists in store.

I'm trying to show both sides and how it's basically a deadly international chess match that they're both trying to win, and I'll admit I do enjoy creating a bit of confusion about who to root for.

Thank you so much for yet another great review!

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