|Review:||Violet Gryfindor says:|
Oh my gosh, Rin, this is beautiful! It was great to see your name appear on the recently added list - it's been a while since I've read something of yours, and a familiar name on the recently added pages is hard to resist. I'm very glad that I read this - it's not a short I would have imagined, but it fits somehow. However what really drew me in, once I began to read, was your language.
The personification in your descriptions was perfect, with candle flames eating the walls and the years stretching and bleeding... I'm having a fangirl moment right now over your use of figurative language, so excuse me if I can't think of anything rational to say about your writing. It's amazing. Very beautiful and amazing. I loved the play between the flames and the water throughout this story, how each was associated with a character - Dean's questioning Daphne's appearance amidst the storm really drove this home, as though it's unnatural for her to be out in the rain. And it is unnatural for the flame - she's extinguished. *cries* It's perfect.
You've written something brilliant here, not that I'm at all surprised. It's fantastic to have another taste of your writing talents. I love Daphne's epiphany and Dean's reaction to it - instead of feeling merely unresolved, it's very powerful to see her sad realization that maybe, in another life, another time, she could have been loved. It's heartbreaking. The perfect short stories for me are those that make me feel something, and this one has definitely done that. Thank you for sharing this fantastic story!
Author's Response: Oh my goodness, Violet, if you could see the beam that has been plastered on my face for the past minute, you'd laugh. Honestly, your kindness and feedback and comments are just lovely, and I appreciate them to pieces.
Admittedly, I haven't written anything in quite a while, and I'm just starting to shake the dust off my keyboard and dig in again. So I'm very flattered that you liked this newest attempt at, you know, writing something.
Can I just point out that I'm still beaming? OK. Moving on.
We've been reading a lot of poetry in class lately, and my professor always talks about personification, and I absolutely adore it. There's something about giving inanimate things or abstract concepts... life. And I'm blown away that you've noticed it, because it often just slips by people (and that's completely understandable, because it's generally subtle).
You... are lovely. And I'm absolutely, positively, completely and utterly flattered that you've said what you have. Thank you so, so much for your comments. Especially coming from you, they mean the world to me.