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Review:ScorpiusRose17 says:
Hi there!

I am here with your next review!

The two cousins kind of remind me of the step sisters in Cinderella. I loved how you portrayed them and showed the haughty demeanor of the Pureblood status. I think you did a wonderful job bringing it out and showing Amelie's dislike towards it.

I liked how you described the perfect person she had become in order to hide herself away from the awful feelings she harbored. I loved it when you put in Amelie's thoughts, especially with Walburga's name. =)

I also liked how she shocked Sirius by giving him a swift punch. He reminded me of the Cheshire cat sitting in the tree and watching the scene unfold beneath him. You brough out his astute side very well when he tells her exactly what she's been doing.

I did see a couple of confusing sentences because of a few typos, but nothing that was major to take away from the chapter itself. I also had a hard time understanding the French, but I thought it was beautiful to include it. It's a lovely language.

Overall, I thought you did an amazing job. I was happy to see what and how Amelie did and felt. I loved the interactions between her and the Black's. I love the plot that you have created and I am exicted to read more.

Keep up the great work! =)

-SR17

Author's Response: Hello again!

Yeah, I'm not going to lie, they did inspire me a bit during writing. They're such good stock characters.

Sirius, in my mind, has always been too clever for his own good. Any misdemeanours of his are just a result of thrill-seeking. I really wanted to establish this relationship of anger and insight right from the beginning, almost to make the ensuing drama inevitable.

i.e. punching him in front of all those purebloods. Disgraceful.

Haha, it's so funny; I wrote all of this so long ago, you're reminding me of my own story. Walburga :')

Again, I'll try and look for those typos soon to tidy up the writing. Thank you for sharing your opinions, it's very helpful to know what readers think.

I hope you enjoyed reading and me asking you to review again won't be too much of a chore!

joojoo
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