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Review:ScorpiusRose17 says:
Hi there!

I am finally here with your review. Sorry for it taking this long. I am usually faster so my apologies for that.

First of all I want to say that you have done a wonderful job capturing my attention with this first chapter. I really enjoyed reading it and enjoyed the characters. I really thought you did a wonderful job making Amelie stand out with her feelings towards her dad. Those connections are something that readers can relate to because they are exsistant all the time. I also enjoyed how you made me feel towards her mother. At first I thought, 'Oh, is she going to be like Narcissa?' but you have gone above and beyond that and made her truly vile. I like having a character that I can love to hate.

I am interested to know what he did to become a blood traitor. I am also interested in this clever little Amelie and what she is going to do. I love the mysterious feel that this chapter has.

I did notice some typos and confusing sentences that could be spruced up to make it work a bit better. I was also a little confused at who Sasha was. Is it her teddy bear or another doll that she had?

Overall, I loved this first chapter. I really enjoyed all the emotion and tense situation between her parents. I think everyone can relate to seeing their parents argue and know how unpleasant that is to see and hear it going on. I thought you did a wonderful job describing all of the emotions and lack there of for her mom in the chapter as well.

Keep up the great work! =)

-SR17

Author's Response: Why hello! :) It's not a problem, I know reviewing can be a long job, and obviously what with life and everything, sometimes it's difficult to be efficient.
Her mother's a serious piece of work. If you love to hate her, you're going to get the opportunity to hate her loads in this story. I'm glad I managed to get all those various elements through :)
Her father's story is hinted at at various points. It's not a major part of the plot but it definitely has a role to play.
I'll try look for those typos. Thanks for bringing that to my attention. Yes, Sasha was her doll at the beginning.
And thank you for the review! I hope you enjoy the rest of the story just as much :)

joojoo
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