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Review:CypressQueen says:
Hi.
I think this story has a really good plot and is really well written. I only found one spelling mistake and that was

Id love tom but first we have to get the thing fixed. She pulled out her wand but Frank stopped her." I think you mean to not tom. Maybe instead of the you could use this.

In the beginning Frank says "yes, a boat. You see, I broke it two nights ago and left it by The Rock but I cant seem to..."
But later on in the last paragraph you refer to The Rock as the rocks. I would just keep it as the rocks as they probably wouldn't be named.

I think you did really well on fluffness. I find the story really sweet. I don't think you need to elaborate that much on the ending, but you could maybe put in something like "and long after they had graduated from Hogwarts, they still kept coming to their special place at the rocks."

I was curious on why you chose Prewett as Alice's last name as it would mean that she was related to Molly Weasley and her family. Maybe she was a cousin of Molly's as Sirius Black says that all the old pure-blooded family's are related.

I don't think you need to worry about your story's length as less is often more. I really enjoyed everything and I thought that you portrayed Alice and Frank Longbottom. You don't know much about them in the books but you wrote them, very much as I had imagined them.

Hope this helps.
~CypressQueen~

Author's Response: Hey!

Thank you! Oh a spelling mistake! *goes and hides in a corner* thank you for pointing that out, I'll be sure to fix it! Thank you! Ah, more mistakes! I should really proof read my stories before I publish them :P *headdesk*

Thank you! I'm not used to writing fluff (I usually write angst, angst and more angst for the topping) so I'm glad you thought I'd do well!

Yeah, to me that's just always been her last name so yeah to me, she's Molly's sister. JK never really told us Alice's last maiden name so we fans had to guess :P

Thank you and yes, it helped a lot!
Jas


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