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Review:ScorpiusRose17 says:
This was another brilliant chapter! I am still amazed at how well you keep it all in second person. I think it adds to it really well. =)

I liked Molly's characterization. I like how you show us that she is smart when it comes to playing chess, but she is not so snobby about it like I have seen her written in other stories. It's been a relief to read about her in a good light because I was worried that it was how people always portrayed her. She shows a wonderful caring side in this chapter with Cassius and I liked how she wasn't able to answer the riddle. It made her more human and more relatable.

I am still worried about the book that she started to read and how it has started to throw her off. Like waking up late and what not. I am excited to see what else happens with it, even though I am nervous.

You've done a wonderful job with the description and the pace along with the flow has been consistantly well balanced and smooth throughout the chapters I've read so far. It's nice and steady.

Overall, I think this is just an amazing story. I have become very fond of reading about Molly. I love her character and the way you have brought her to life in the story. I love the way you describe the scenes and atmosphere. The pace and flow are well balanced and smooth. I am worried about that book though. Thank you for writing something so intriguing to the mind!

Keep up the great work! =)


Author's Response: Haha, thank you! It's got so much easier as I've gone along... I dunno... it just fits, I guess.

Thanks! I know, I've seen a couple of snobbish Mollys (and Lucys, too) so I knew at the beginning that I wanted to stay away from those sorts of lines. Molly's such a perfectionist, so it's fun to play around with her character - setting up Cassius as an opponent (and a close one too) and giving her riddles she can't do. I'm so mean to my characters, but ah well. Thank you!

Haha - you should be! ;) Yeah, more stuff will definitely happen with it, although you won't find out everything until... a certain point. (I haven't got to that bit yet, lol).

Thank you! I always worry about that - particularly when things get more dramatic, you know? It always feels faster to me, and I wonder if it's the same for everyone else and it just doesn't work...

Thank you so so much for this! I love this review! You've targeted everything I'm worried about, you've picked up on the book (which is key to the plot :D), you're understanding my characters so perfectly... gah, it's just amazing! Thank you so much!

Aph xx

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