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Review:x0xShattered_Dreamsx0x says:
Okay, so this chapter is definitely lengthier than the first but done with an effortless flair that made it readable and understandable while not being totally overwhelming - the pace is quick, the paragraphs are short, and there is a lot of dialogue which is good.

I enjoyed the banter between Hugo and Dimitri, it was cute and made me smile particularly the part about Hugo wanting to the throw the ice pack. The only think I didn't like was that you kept referring to Dimitri as 'he' until he revealed his name and that can sometimes come across as awkward and confusing to a reader particularly when there are two male characters and could therefore both be the 'he' in the scene. But that was the only issue I had and it didn't take away from the story.

My favorite part would be the scene from the Burrow toward the end, the little moment passing between Teddy and Hugo. I liked that quite a lot and can't wait to see how that unravels in the story as well as what will happen once it is revealed that Hugo was in fact bitten.

Thoroughly am enjoying this story so far and can't wait to see what will happen in the next chapters.

~SD~

Author's Response: Hugo/Dimitri banter is fun to write... :P

Yeah, I understand what you mean. It's because it's written from Hugo's POV and Hugo didn't know his name until he was told... :)

I love writing Teddy and Hugo's relationship. Teddy is the oldest in the family, whereas Hugo is the youngest, the baby, so he's like the big brother; very protective.

Thank you. :)

Sam.



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