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Review:Moonyxluna says:
Hi! I'm here from the puff review tag :)

This is a really intriguing start. Since you have this labeled as a Scorpius/OC, I watched for some interactions between the pair and I wasn't disappointed. She's got the perfect amount of distain towards Scorpius to eventually fall for him :)

I like Katherine so far. She seems like a really nice, well rounded person. It's nice to see someone else (eventually, I'm thinking ahead)going for Scorpius besides Rose- usually she doesn't have too much competition when it comes to being paired with Scorpius, so I'm interested to see what comes from that.

From the little bit of Scorpius perspective we got it seems like Katherine is misjudging him. Not that that's a bad thing, it's actually an interesting setup, but I hope she'll realize he's different than what she sees. As a bookworm, she should know not to judge a book by its cover ;)

One thing I would suggest, if you go back and edit, is to find a way to bring Katherine's name into the story sooner. It didn't show up until 2/3 of the way down, and I felt myself wondering who the 'I' I was reading about was. Maybe, when Rose and Albus get into the compartment, just have them say "Hi Katherine" or something? Just to at least get a first name out there.

The little flash back was a neat way to incorporate what makes her who she is today. It's intriguing-- it makes me think something like that may happen again with the way you've introduced it. Maybe Scorpius can be her knight in shining armor :D hehe. Getting ahead of myself!

Overall this was a really great start. I didn't notice any spelling/punctuation stuff so good job there! Great work on this!

Author's Response: Thanks! So sorry it took me so long to respond! I haven't been on here for ages. I've had to take a hiatus from writing on here, but hopefully I'm back now!

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