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Review:RosieQueen says:
It's Rosie with your requested review! :)

The moment of truth for Cassie! Dun-dun-dun...!
This gets more and more interesting, doesn't it!

The flow, grammar, punctuation, and everything else was perfect! Very easy to follow and understand, which is terrific!

Only noticed one mistake: You said the flashback occurred on June 1, 2009. That doesn't make sense. James II would either be four or five years old in 2009. Most of the time, authors calculate the ages of their OC and Next-Generation characters to be mathematically correct. Just to let you know, the epilogue took place in 2017, On 2017, James II was twelve or thirteen years old, so he most definitely wouldn't be a teenager in 2009. If you need help figuring out the ages of the next-gen characters, go to Harry Potter wiki, which is what most authors use to get their characters' ages right.

Also, I know James II/OC isn't on the pairings list, but just so that you don't confuse the reader into thinking it's a marauders era story at first glance, change it to "other pairing." :)

These are very minor mistakes, and don't interfere with the story's plot at all! I still think is a wonderfully written, well thought out story, and I'm very anxious to read the next chapter and read about what happens to Cassie! :D

~Rosie

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing so quickly! :)

Yes, I know about the year mistake. I meant to clarify that I was making all of this take place in the present in my "Author's Note" thing. I just needed to use the present as the time period, so everyone's up-to-date with all the current events and cultural things - it comes into play a bit.

I'll also change the pairing! Sorry that was confusing, dear :P

I'm so happy you're enjoying this so far! I'll make sure to re-request so you'll find out what happens ;)

Thanks for such a great review! :D

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