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Review:CambAngst says:
Tagging you again from the Review the Person Above You thread in the common room.

This was a really terrific chapter. You brought in a lot of new characters and placed them in very complimentary roles, I thought. Starting out with Lucius Malfoy and Avery, you did a great job of laying out the touch-and-go life of the Death Eaters. Nobody seems completely sure of what's going on, and misunderstandings appear to be the norm. Even though Lucius is a detestable character, I adored his little jab at Snape about his mother. It was so perfectly in character for him. I still have a lot of questions about what exactly Karkaroff is having Snape do and how Snape's mother's death fits into the story, but then again, it appears that Snape is still trying to figure all of that out, as well.

So it seems that Sybill Trelawny has already made the prophesy that binds Harry and the Dark Lord together. I really liked the way you portrayed her. It's very important not to take her too seriously. She is the living embodiment of the phrase "even a stopped clock shows the right time twice a day." And holy crap, you used the term "microenvironment". Somebody has a chemistry or biology background…

The way that you're building his report with Dorcas is really nice. There's a definite chemistry there, and it's more than just the fact that they both have a knack for potions and she's his handler from the Order. I liked his brief exploration of his feelings towards her. Knowing how her story ends -- and assuming that you'll stick to canon -- I'm already dreading her run-in with the Dark Lord but looking forward to reading your exploration of its effect on Snape.

And you end it off with the Three Stooges-type routine in Snape's flat. This was my favorite line in the whole chapter: "Avery nodded and stood up, stretching languidly like an overgrown gnome after a badly executed Growth Charm… with really stupid hair." Just brilliant.

So where did Snape apparate to? I'm going to guess Hogwarts, but maybe I'm thinking too far ahead.

Great work! Will be looking to tag you again...

Author's Response:

"looking forward to reading your exploration of its effect on Snape"

Exactly. :) It's a canon story, so most of the challenges I had were fitting it in with everything that had gone before and also what is to come.

And yes, at this point, Sybill has made the prophecy, but nobody is sure what it all means yet, and also yes, the Death Eaters aren't sure about much either... nobody is. I had a lot of fun with these characters (particularly Sybill and Avery), if you haven't already noticed. So there will be more clueless-ness to come.

To tell you the truth, my higher education classes were a while ago *cough*, but if those college-level chemistry classes don't come in handy sometime in one's life, what use are they??

Thanks so much for the review!

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