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Review:MercyWaters says:
Hello! I saw your post on the Review thread, so I decided to come check this out. Welcome to Ravenclaw! (:

I thought this lovely, a good first try to James/Lily. I love the interactions between them and how comforting James is to Lily. Their love and affection for one another seemed realistic and nothing seemed forced. The dialogue at the beginning when James was playing with Harry was cute as well. :) The writing flowed well and I didn't notice any glaring grammatical or spelling mistakes.

I especially loved how you ended it. It was so bittersweet, seeing them so happy with one another, yet knowing within hours their happiness would end. It gives the reader a feeling of sadness, which in this case isn't a bad thing. It means you're writing effectively and pulling at our heart strings.

Lovely job! Keep writing!

Bri xx

Author's Response: That was quick! Thank you, I love being a 'Claw already :D

Thank you! It's always how I imagined James&Lily to be with a war hanging over their heads (not to mention a prophecy) Thank you!

Everyone has said that! I would have written their death scenes but it didn't work out. Thank you!

Jas, xx

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