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Review:Moonyxluna says:
Such a lovely chapter. Your writing never ceases to put a smile on my face.

If James is kicking Sirius for using 'Moony', it makes me wonder if you're going to have Lily finding out about Remus in this story. I will just have to sit and wait 'patiently' until then. :) I liked the way you wrote Sirius' distain towards Regulus, as well as the glimpses of the other marauders at breakfast. Love that Lily and Remus are prefects, (I'm assuming Lily doesn't know about Remus' lycanthrophy?) It looks like the start of their good friendship from the books. It reminds me of that bit in the books how Remus tells Harry about his friendship with Harry's mum all the years later.

I loved the bit about Regulus in Potions class, and referencing Severus' potions books. It's those little touches, along with the beautiful imagery you've created that makes this story such a wonderful read every time. With every word of every sentence this story just comes alive that much more, bringing each one of the characters into the light in the perfect way and place.

I love the way you write Severus. His bitterness here, with his almost 'knowing' about James and Lily was so wonderfully written. You have such a perfect understanding for his character, it just makes the story that much better, even if he isn't meant to be one of the main characters.

And then, the fight. I'd love to hear what happened to get it all started from Regulus' point of view. I'm sure it was Sirius; but it's good to see that James wasn't involved. (or so he says), It's that growing up for him that's starting to show, and I think Lily is realizing it.

As always, beautiful work here. This story just gets better and better every time I read it! Looking forward to chapter six!

Author's Response: You know, I think yours is still the only review I have on this chapter, so I feel extraordinarily bad that I haven't gotten a chance to review it before now. School absolutely ate my life during April, and I'm really, truly sorry this is so late. I hope it doesn't put you off reviewing the story in the future.

I'm definitely trying to weave in as many canon moments as I can, just to try to keep the story tied to the familiar plot. For instance, the Marauder's Map will be showing up soon :) I did try to model the Lily/Remus friendship off of Remus's comments from canon, so I'm glad that came through okay and that you enjoyed it. And no, Lily doesn't know about Remus yet. That'll be something else that will have to come up, I imagine.

I love writing Potions class scenes, and this one was no exception. I felt like it was a fun way to reference the events of HBP and to draw Regulus and Severus closer together. It's great that you feel like all the details help to bring the story alive, because that's my intention.

Oh, my gosh, that might be the biggest compliment I've ever gotten. I love Snape's character so much, even more so for all of his faults, and I've tried so hard to make his portrayal interesting, realistic, and meaningful in this story. Thank you so much for saying that :) He's sort of a main character, in a way, so I look forward to exploring him even more.

Hmm, I'll have to keep that in mind. Maybe Regulus will have a thing or two to say about it :) I'm still trying to be fair to James and help him grow up a little, and Lily is starting to see it as well, whether she likes it or not.

You're super sweet. Thanks again! I promise that I'll start work on chapter six soon :)

-Amanda


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