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Review:SeverusSnape15 says:
Hello again!

So, I think this chapter needed a little more. It was good, but it was pretty general. Usually, chapters are based on something, but this...well, it just seemed like it needed more. Again, with the paragraphs and description. There was a bit more description in this chapter than the last, but not much more. It still needs a lot of it.

Was cooking one of the things that Molly remembered? If so, you'd probably want to specify this. Maybe something like "This was one of the only things that she could really recall" or whatever. Just a suggestion, because it just sounds slightly odd that she doesn't know how to work the shower, yet she can remember how to make pancakes without explanation. :)

I do like this story, though! I really want to know who the guy is...that's a very good twist to this story so far. It's interesting, keeping me on edge.


Author's Response: I wanted this chapter to be Molly getting her bearings, so it is a bit filler-y. I'll see if I can flesh it out a bit more.

The cooking- you point out fantastic things! You are wonderful, thanks so much, I shall change that immediately! :D

Thanks for the review!!

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