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Review:SeverusSnape15 says:
Hey! Cierra(SS15) here with your review from the forums! My apologies on taking so long. I've been busy lately. I'll have all of your chapters done by today.

So, the first thing I noticed was the fact that you called the Healers, nurses. Though they would have been called Nurses in regular hospitals, in St. Mungos, it would have been Healers. Then, later, Molly says 'my Healer..' So, that made it a bit confusing if you didn't know the difference. I'm sure you do, though.

Second..I love PostSecrets ;) Just had to say that. Anyways, I think it was pretty good..but try adding a bit more detail. How was Molly feeling when James said that to her? WHY was she hurting because of the comment? How did that effect her? Details are good, you can almost never have too much. Most of your paragraphs are a bit short, so try to group them together if you don't really have much else to say. But, as I said before, detail is needed. I want to know what everything looks like..

The beginning was a bit confusing, in all honesty. I didn't understand it at first, but I did after a little bit. This sounds like it'll be a nice story. I'll move on to the next chapter, now. ~Cierra.

Author's Response: Hello, it's alright, RL can be awful sometimes :)

I totally didn't realise that- in my head the nurses and Healers were supposed to be different, but it should all be Healers, thanks for pointing that out!

More detail, got it :D

And the beginning was supposed to be a bit confusing, because Molly was confused about her surroundings.

Thanks very much for the review! :D


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