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Review:JessiesGirl says:
Hey there! JessiesGirl from the forums here with your review!

Well, where to start? I simply adored this! I will admit that I've never been a massive marauders fan; Lily and James have been so overused that it gets boring reading so many similar versions of their love life. This little one-shot that you've got here however ticked all the right boxes for me. It was original and fluffy but not too cliche.

There are however a particular few points I would like to address. Firstly, the part where James tells Lily to 'piss off' seems a little bit out of character for him. I wouldn't find it unusual if he said this to anybody else; I just struggle to envision him saying that to Lily. The use of taboo lexis makes the statement sound slightly too aggressive and inappropriate for the given situation; perhaps 'sod off' might work better. It's just a suggestion though so feel free to ignore it if you wish. Also, I have a quick question because I'm confused. If they were able to summon a house elf for food, then couldn't they have asked the house-elf to notify somebody that they were locked in a cupboard? I'm sorry if you answered this already in the story and I missed it, it's just left me a bit baffled.

I absolutely love the fact that it was Lily who asked James out and not the other way round. It makes for such a refreshing change! I also found it really sweet that James chose to tell Lily about his mother before he told Siirius; not only does it show how much he loves her but it also suggests that he's got her figured out and he knows he can trust her which personally I think is so romantic.

I really enjoyed reading this!

x - JessiesGirl - x

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