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Review:Akussa says:
Hello! Here I finally am with your requested reviews. Sorry if it took some time but I had to get back into the story so I read it over again; it's even more interesting then I remember!

I really enjoyed this action packed chapter. I was a bit surprised that the Longbottoms made an apparition in this story. It was a pleasant surprise though and I have to say that I really like how you characterized Alice; she is exactly the way I imagine her to be.

The story is moving forward really nicely and I love the different intricated side-stories you put in there; give a fuller feel to your story.

It was all very clean and flowed quite nicely, except for two sentence that I had to read a couple times; I point them out to you and I know I might be completly wrong and they could be correct. I just want you to know that I stumbled on those and it broke my read a bit.

"...She knew that Alice Longbottom was an Auror, but this woman did not resemble fighter."; somehow, it feels like something is missing near the end (...ressemble 'a' fighter maybe? although that doesn't sound great either)

"...The other Aurors were saved from having to answer when a sound, a disharmonious alarm. "; feels like a verb is missing at the end of the sentence; I kept expecting more but the sentence ends..

Overall, a very good chapter that pushes the story forward in many ways. I enjoyed it a lot and it was fun to get back to this story. Thanks for requesting!

Author's Response: Hi! That's absolutely fine. It took me forever to respond as well.

Yes, I definitely tried to add some more action back into the story. And I'm glad you like the characterization of Alice. The side stories are definitely something I'm trying to include.

Yes, I did mean "a fighter" thanks for pointing that out. I'll fix them both right away.

I'm glad you enjoyed reading this chapter and thank you very much for the helpful review.

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