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Review:AndrinaBlack says:
I've wanted to read more Minerva stories than I have for a long time, so when looking for a story on your page, this caught my eye. But I also got interested because of the summary. I'm already really into this story.

I don't think I've read anything of yours before (unless I've read an older story which I didn't spot while scrolling down your page) and I really like your writing. Your story flows really well, though I can see that this would be a quite difficult chapter to write without making it too heavy, with all the background and little action or dialogue. The way you wrote it just pulled me along. I especially admire the way you got in the first letter to the chapter, without writing it all at once.

Just a little nitpicking, if I may do that. Just to get in some CC. :P I think you used for instead of from at one place and wonder instead of wander at one time. Then this sentense took a couple of reads for me to figure out: "Minerva was as disinterested in muggle music as she was Wizarding music, and had found that even more frustrating than achieving nothing from her efforts." I think you mean that what's frustrating was to get just half a song from the radio instead of some news or something, so it might work better if you started with the last part of the sentense "She had found that even more..." and continue with something like "because she was as disintrested in muggle...". That would connect the frustration both to the previous sentense and the disintrest part better. But you know, that's just a little thing (just takes long to explain.)

And I was going to say how I love to read this historical timeperiod, which you also seem to have thought about and researched properly. You get in a lot of info about that and how it's for muggles and wizards and witches, and at the same time we get a lot of info about her life, her character and some sort of feeling about her friends.

A great chapter and beginning of a story all in all! I'm glad I found it!

Author's Response: Hey there! I've always found Minerva stories interested and when I got this for the challenge I just couldn't resist. It seemed so new and exciting :D

I'm pretty sure you've never reviewed anything of mine before, so I'm really glad that you enjoyed my writing! I had a lot of fun writing this chapter, actually, and I really enjoyed writing the letter and stuff :)

I'd actually just gotten a beta right before receiving this review, ahha. So I think that some of those things have been changed slightly, but I'll go back and look at that sentence about wizarding music. Thanks for pointing it out for me! I really appreciate it :)

Not knowing much about History (starting to regret dropping it two years ago), I bugged my friend about it a little and then started googling and stuff.

I'm so glad you enjoyed it! And thanks so much for reading :D

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