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Review:javct says:
Back again.

As I said before this story has definite potential however there were a few flaws in this chapter. For example, the spacing between the paragraphs were a tad off putting (you may want to fix this), also, why does Neville have muggle-things? He is, after all, a pureblood and the same goes for Draco. I highly doubt that Draco would ever own a phone (unless he got it especially for the occasion)

There were a few grammatical errors: missing spaces, mis-spelt words etc. May I suggest getting a beta for this story? Being a beta and getting my stories beta'd I can safely say that they are extremely friendly and harmless (most of the time haha) :)

The characterisation, however, was really good :) I think you've got both Neville and Pansy down-pat so good job with that!

Good job!
Jas

Author's Response: Yea, sorry about the flaws. I'm trying to get the chapters up as fast as I can because I have to have the three up by this weekend. I beta my own chapters now (due to some un-reliable betas in the past unfortunately) and I beta on other sites, but as I said, I just tried getting this up. It will be edited shortly after the third chapter goes up though. :) The spacing, however, is due to the site as I've been told. I just have to go back and edit it out. Neville and Draco having Muggle things is extremely important to my plot-line. I'm glad that you love the characters though, and I hope you continue reading! Thanks for the read and review! :D

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