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Review:CambAngst says:
Hi, there. I'm back for another chapter.

This one was short but very revealing. So it seems that the Parkinson family fortune has fallen much farther than we've seen up to this point. Poor Pansy is going to have to (gasp) work? The horror!

I really loved the way you wrote her interaction with the goblin teller. It felt so much like the scene in Deathly Hallows where the trio try to gain entrance to Bellatrix's vault. Everything was quiet enough to hear quills scratch and very sterile and formal. Just perfectly done.

I noticed one typo in this section that you might want to take a look at: It was too bad that the goblins didnít them as such - see them as such?

The visit to Tebak's office was also a nice piece of writing. Everything seems to be a power struggle where the goblins are concerned. All the little details, like the lighting, the chair and the pace at which Tebak reviews her family account are all about gaining and maintaining advantage. I thought you captured the interaction wonderfully.

Can't wait to see how she handles her N.E.W.T.s or what sort of work she tries to obtain!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for taking the time to review again! I'm very pleased to hear that you enjoyed the scene in Gringotts- I had a lot of fun writing it. It's always very interesting to write from Pansy's point of view because she truly believes that wizards (and witches) are better than other magical beings and all her interactions reflect this opinion. Her upbringing comes out with each interaction she has with another person/creature (to me at least) and now she's trying to reverse that influence (outwardly, at the very least).

Thanks for pointing out the typo! I think that I was referring to the previous sentence about the value of the desks and how the goblins didn't seem to care how valuable they are. I guess it didn't come across as nicely as I'd have liked.

The next several chapters will show her reactions and actions regarding N.E.W.T.s- she has a lot of studying ahead of her because, after all, she never was very good with her academics.


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