Hey, this is Beeezie, here with your review! Sorry about the delay - I was away and didn't really have time to fill requests, but I'm back now. :)
I'm not sure how helpful this review is going to be, because I'm not entirely sure that I will find anything negative to say about this chapter. There's nothing like a good parody; you had me in stitches for the entire thing. I absolutely adored it.
I thought that you did two things very, very well. First, you captured the cliches brilliantly. More importantly, however, you expressed them in a funny, engaging way that drew me into the story. It's not just that the content was funny; the writing was. I really love "Their Finest Hour," and that was obviously the first story of yours that I read, and you're definitely starting to win me over as a humour writer as well. I remember really enjoying your first Voldemort story (I'm not sure I've read any since then…), and I like this even better.
So, yeah. I think you've really managed to perfect humour writing. It's not just that you used the overdone cliches of Hermione suddenly being beautiful, or referenced Cedward (classic, btw) - it's that you did it with such style.
There were so many amazing lines in this. The 'magical breeze' indoors to make Hermione's hair billow? Super Sexy Power Ranger Granger? I also loved the Michael Jackson reference - you didn't just go for the easy dig, and it was absolutely genius. And then you got to the honeymoon suite.
So perfect. And the LOL just kidding, it's Draco Malfoy! Seriously, who else would it be? just made it even better. Honestly, I could easily quote half the story singling out all the great quotes, but I'm going to stop myself with Baby, I never even tried to be in character. Perfect.
And oh, the football. You were right. I do appreciate the football. So, so much. Perfect choice to choose a London club, too (well, I mean, for the Michael Jackson reference, you kind of had to go with Fulham, because no other club has made such a bizarre decision, but aside from that). There's are so many clubs that play out of London, and especially if you're playing fast and loose with time periods (which I'm assuming you are, since the statue of Michael Jackson only went up a few years ago, and since I'm pretty sure Fulham weren't in the first division in the 90s), you can start throwing all kinds of fixtures into the mix without bothering to think about whether the clubs were actually all in the first division at the time.
Or maybe only about five people would be amused by something like QPR v. Fulham in a fic that's supposedly set in the 90s because only five people would really get the joke. And/or I have a dumb sense of humour. :P At any rate, I found all of that highly amusing.
But yeah. You knew I would love that. Especially the Arsenal mention! I mean, I know that this was hardly Arsenal's finest hour, but still. ♥ Hermione getting into football culture will be amazing.
I'm sorry this review was horribly unhelpful, but feel free to rerequest! I'll certainly make my way back here even if you don't, but it might take awhile. :P Thank you so much for requesting, and I'm sorry again about the wait. :)
Author's Response: Hey Beezie thanks for such a great review!, and no worries about the wait, the quality more than makes up for it.
I was trying to work in as many Dramione cliches as I could, I think the only ones I missed were Hermione being a Zabini and a masquerade ball. And of course the shots at Twilight were just too easy.
The funny thing is, I originally intended to write a serious story about Dean Thomas hiding out with West Ham hooligans when he's on the run in book 7, but it somehow morphed into this.
You're totally right about why a London team would be best, and I also wanted a team that was kind of an underdog and not known for having a big firm either. In true Dramione fashion, I'm not really striving for accuracy when it comes to the timing, so I'm pretty much just using the current football landscape.
Thanks for such a great review!