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Review:Maelody says:
Plot line: Weren't you the one who just told me you don't write darker things? Well, I find it hard to believe because you do a wonderful job describing how people feel in terrible times. However, I am extremely intrigued in what you have going on with how she was there when he died (I'm assuming anyway since it was 'her fault'). It is a good plot so far by what I can tell, and I am extremely excited to continue with this. Reading the letter, I thought this would be a fun comedy, and then BOOM it got sad lol. Good job, playing with my emotions like that. Again, your description is marvelous and I love every describing word you used.


Characterization:
I loved Ginny, because I know she will stay strong no matter what. However, just because Harry is so close to Hermione (I would assume he is even just a little more close with her than Ginny, though I don't doubt they are extremely close either), I don't see him allowing Ginny to do something like that. Or at least, asking her to help Hermione get better some other way without dating. Unless, of course, it is slightly behind his back? Otherwise, Hermione was done wonderfully. I truly think that would be the way she would break down, minus saying that she was fine. I think she would have come to terms with herself long before she admits in this story rather than just admitting her state now.

Spelling and grammar:
It was wonderful, there were just a few missing words (more like words that were either unfinished or a typo). Such as "as" instead of "and" that was accidentally put in there. Your grammar was good either way, so good job! :)

General liking of the story:
I really want to continue reading this story. I think your description is wonderful, and I really want to know how Ron died. It will be interesting to see how this dating thing works (assuming she actually does look in to it), and I hope to see some Harry really soon. Good job! 8/10!

Author's Response: Hey! Yes, I was the one who said that. I figured this was a different kind of "dark" story. But now that I think about it, I guess it isn't. Just manifests a bit differently. Thanks!

Harry is away on some Auror business at the moment. But in the next few chapters we will see him. Ginny kinda made him help her with it. Lol. I'm glad you like Ginny and Hermione. Never really be good with female characters.

I'll have to look it over again to catch the errors, thanks for pointing them out.

I'm thrilled that you like the story so far. Ron's death will be the center of most of the beginning so you'll find out fairly shortly what's going on. XD And yes, Harry will be around soon too.

Thanks!
Brittanique


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