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Review:StarryLaura says:
These two frustrate me. XD They're too careful around each other.

Haha well I loved that they see the exact same thing in the mirror. It must've been distracting yet empowering at the same time. ;)

The spell and the conch seashell were cute, but I think you took a bit too long on them because when you brought the story back to their relationship I felt like you had gone off on a tangent. So stay more focused?

When they cuddled and talked, it was so adorable. :3 I love it when they're just being romantic together and they both have thoughts of truly being together.

And one more thing. Sometimes I think the story's too dark all the time...You might want to lighten up some chapters. Not like the ping pong game at the beginning of the story, but some filler chapters where we don't have to feel so suffocated by the darkness of the story. :)

Anyways, fantastically great chapter, keep writing!

Author's Response: StarryLaura,

Okay... finally I can respond. Geesh...

Well, I am glad that you liked the mirror bit. I'm sure there are stories with these two in front of the mirror, but I don't remember reading much. I didn't want that to be the main focus of the chapter, but I couldn't resist using it in my story. Anyway... glad that you liked it. :)

You think I spent too much time on the spell and the shell? Well... the spell is important later in the story and the shell was extremely important as it was my own 'magical element' in this chapter that brought these two together in a very romantic way. So, I'm not sure how you felt that I went off on a tangent. :/ The point is that even if they try to keep things light and on the surface, they are drawn to each and can't help themselves. Sorry, I'm not sure what you mean by 'stay more focused.' They are the ones that are having trouble focusing on anything but each other.

It sounds like you didn't really like it. Sorry.

And as far as 'too dark'. Well, I do try to have them laughing at each other a bit as they have glimpses of being light. But honestly... this story is dark and I warned in the Summary that this was emotionally sad.

It is not meant to be humorous or fun. I'll warn you now that the next several chapters are very sad and DARK with no plans of changing it.

It gets very, very serious... heart-wrenching truly. I'm writing Hermione's heart for this next chapter and Draco fights a friend. And then one more with them together romantically, then Sectumsempra, then the war. VERY SAD. Sorry, no filler or fluff. I've cried while writing pieces of chapter 19 and 21! If you feel 'suffocated by the darkness,' then maybe this story isn't something you are going to like. :/

Thanks for your honesty. I appreciate it, but I hope you understand mine.

Dark Whisper

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