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Review:Maelody says:
Here we go, as promised! :)

Plot line:
As of right now (by your summary) it sounds like I'm going to have a lot of fun getting to see how Harry and Ginny fall in love all over again. However, I don't think I like the way it happened. Though it goes with characterization, I really don't think Ginny would ever blame Harry for her brother's death, because she of most all people understood what they were fighting for. Though it was pretty short, I liked everything you put in for us to see. I thought that maybe the character switches were a little abrupt and could have used some separation, but then that also would have made the chapter look much shorter than it is. Also, the bit of Harry being under the rocks was a little confusing. Was he walking along when they fell on him? I would like to know what happened in that time space there. :)

Characterization:
Like I mentioned before, I don't really like Ginny's characterization, but I do think it will be fun to see them fall in love again. Just because I don't like it or think it wouldn't happen, doesn't mean that it couldn't. :) Though, Harry's behavior was a little odd to me, too. I would think that he wouldn't exactly mope around like he did, at least about Ginny. Maybe he would feel the loss of a family due to fear of them hating him for their son, but it is great to know Arthur called him son even though he just lost one of his own. Arther, by the way, was a very nice touch and I loved it. :)

Spelling and grammar:
Arthur Weasley heard, not head. :) Also, there should be a comma before or after every time you say someone's name. "Harry, come over here." "Come over here, Harry." Not, "Harry come over here." "Come over here Harry." Otherwise, everything seemed alright to me!

General liking of the story:
I will say this again because I am honestly excited to see this story continue: I can't wait to see how Ginny and Harry fall in love with one another again. I think they are my favorite pair (on other sites I'm known as ginnypotter19, if that gives any hint as to how much I love the pair lol). I would like to see it continue, and I'd like to see as you get better along the way! I will give this particular chapter a 6/10! :)

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I am going to re-write most of the chapters, and go through them carefully looking for spelling mistakes. Again, thank you so much! ~Magicalis

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