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Review:charlottetrips says:
Hi Adele! No hard feelings at all. I hope we’ve cleared that up between us, else we’ll just keep apologizing to each other :)

An interesting tidbit of HP canon to take up. And you’ve chosen to tell his story in a one-shot so I’m interested to see if you can make him into a 3 dimensional character by the end of it, so I’ll care what happens to him.

[p]rofessor Binns[] emotionless tone - the “p” should be capitalized and there should be an apostrophe to denote the possessive noun of Binns’ emotionless tone. There are a few more grammar/spelling errors which could be caught with a good read through.


I like how you’ve made Caradoc to be. He’s impulsive, brave and willing to fight the good fight though the way he may be going about it might not be the best way to do so. He has a healthy respect for Dumbledore but at the same time considers himself to be his own man. It’s interesting to think of Dumbledore as a general yet also not the sort of general that one lived in fear of, unlike Voldemort’s side of things.

What a simple movement or action to get oneself caught. His prayers in the end and how he hopes futilely that he’ll come out is sad. A very believable way for Caradoc to go. It’s not completely unique but you’ve got your own twist on it and I like that I have more of an idea of the type of character that Caradoc is…was :(

The way you wrote this was also slightly formal and I liked it as it was of the older generation and I felt that that kind of made it seem more Marauders’ Era to me.

xChar

Author's Response: Hey there, Char :)

No hard feelings at all. I'm so glad that's cleared up, because I really like you and was so worried when I thought I might have upset you/been misunderstood. But yes, no hard feelings :)

Oops, sorry about that. I'll jump on those spelling/grammar errors ASAP and have a re-read of the story to pick up any others.

I'm glad you like how I've written him. He's so often overlooked and I personally haven't read many stories about him, so when I read the challenge that it was originally written for, I wanted to give it a shot. I'm happy that you liked how I characterised him, because I was really quite nervous.

I didn't have a plan for this when I wrote it, so the style of writing (slightly more formal) just happened, but I actually liked it by the end, and I'm glad that you did too :)

Thanks again for the review. I'm glad you liked it,
- Adele :)


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