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Review:ScorpiusRose17 says:
Hi there!

I thought this story was sad, but in a great way. I thought you did a wonderful job with Remus' emotions. I could feel his heart break a little as he walked through the halls remembering the times he had shared with his friends. It was believable and relatable. I really liked the change in him though when he looked into the mirror again before leaving the room of requirement and seeing himself and Harry getting along the way that him and James did. I thought that was a wonderful turning point in expressing how one understands that there is life after death of those that you love most.

I thought you did a great job describing the scenes. It was subtle and not overwhelming so it didn't take away from your story at all. The flow and pace of the story were well balanced together. I didn't feel rushed while reading it and I didn't feel that it dragged on. I was drawn in from the begining of the story and it held my intrigue throughout. I am really not that great at grammar, but from what I do know, I didn't see anything that stood out to me.

Overall, this was a very nice story and I think you did a brilliant job capturing Remus' feelings, making them real, and keeping them going through the end of the story. You did well with flow, pace, and description. Good Luck in the challenge!

Keep up the great work! =)

Thanks for requesting!
-SR17

Author's Response: I'm glad that you thought it was sad, that's what I tried to do(: And how you said how I got Remus' emotions right, that means a lot, because I was afraid I didn't do that well enough.
And I agree, when he realized that he didn't need to mourn over his friends death, and he could move on, I loved that part.
Also, how you said the pace of the story was good, that made me happy because I was pretty scared that I rushed it, so it means a lot for you to say that it flowed well.

Thank you so much for the review (:

~Sarah
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