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Review:Toujours Padfoot says:
She'd smell like catnip and wand wax. Children would dare each other to come near her.
- loool, this cracked me up.

This group didn't have much experience wasting time on the B-List.
- It would really suck to be the odd one out in a situation like this. I hadn't given it much thought before, but yeah, Victoire is surrounded by go-getters who come, see, and conquer. Not seeing their goals realized is sort of a foreign concept. If Victoire doesn't pretend that her current predicament was fully intended, and exactly where she wants to be in life, people are going to look at her and wonder what she's actively doing wrong. Poor Victoire. But working in a wand shop does sound like fun! To me, at least. I'm a bit nerdy like that.

I like the details you included about how Teddy adopted the traits of those around him, and manipulated his face to fit whatever the situation called for. Since he's wearing a sophisticated costume of sorts, I'm wondering what angle he's working. It's a bit sad that he feels it necessary to change his appearance so much, and makes him seem not very genuine. But this sort of consciousness about his appearance really reminds me of Remus and how Remus was always painfully aware of what he looked like. Is Teddy trying to look too old for Victoire? Is he trying to impress her? Or is he simply different than he was?

I also love the characterizations you've given the other next-gen kids, particularly James. He seems a bit mischievous, and even though he's trying to work his way under Victoire's skin, seeing just how much he can get away with, it's impossible not to like him. He's a hoot. :D

There are a few typos here and there, but they should be an easy fix if you reread it with fresh eyes. And oh my goodness, a quill that matches the color of her eyes! I kept rooting for Teddy to kiss her and then I remembered that he has a girlfriend. DARN IT. Well, he needs to dump Iska or whatever her name is so that he can be with Victoire, because even though he didn't show up at graduation I still like him. He has a maturity about him that I like, and overall he just really reminds me of his father. Careful, quiet, measured, but definitely still capable of making mistakes.

This really is a fantastic story. I'm looking forward to reading more. :)

Author's Response: Yes, poor Victoire. She IS wondering what she actively did wrong :D

Teddy returned different and the reason for that will be clear as the story unfolds, so I can't give too much up. I think the morphing is very natural for him, almost an extension of his overall attention to detail. He'd rather blend than stand out, and he can wear the right features like other people can wear the right clothes for an occasion. Who wouldn't have had fun with that in Hogwarts.

Haha, I've had so much fun with James and Al they are both in my next story :) I love next-gen kids and I'm thrilled their characterizations are coming off well. Also glad you still like Teddy because he's in for a bumpy ride and needs all the support he can get.

Thanks again for the awesome comments!

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