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Review:dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap says:
"She's not an object , Potter!" Draco snaps. "I didn't take her from you - she never even liked you! How can I take something that never belonged to you?"

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LOVED THAT PART RIGHT THERE! I read it over three times because I could hear the echo of Draco's voice and see the anger in his face.

EXCELLENT.

I think the only thing I would say is I was a bit disappointed that Harry didn't act a little stronger and said right away that he would still be her friend. The fight was awesome but I feel like Harry would have fought with Draco, found out if Jayde was alright and then left, without giving her any concrete information if he was or was not planning to be her friend in the future. But then again I never really understood the thoughts and action of Harry.

:D

Author's Response: DEEDS. You just... Wow! You just don't even know how much you made my day right then! There are literally tears in my eyes! You never cease to amaze me with your surprise reviews! I think I'm addicted to them! They just make me want to go "SQUEE!" *Biggest Hug Anyone's Ever Received* Needless to say - THANK YOU SO MUCH!

Haha, I'm rather fond of Draco's line there, myself. :) I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

As for Harry, I agree that he should have been a bit more upset. In the original version of this chapter, I had this whole 'bitter, angsty' Harry (I mean more angsty than usual) portrayed, but I wasn't sure if that was really in character for him, which is why I changed it.

One thing I'm learning through writing this story is that I should leave things the way I'd originally written/planned them. Since I've been editing, I've had several people give me suggestions, like this, and pretty much all of those suggestions were for things that I originally had put in the story before editing! I think this chapter could have been much better if I'd left Harry the way you suggested, also!

I tried to explain away Harry's sudden change in reaction by saying he was concerned when Jayde's eyes turned white, but going forward, I will probably put some more angsty-Harry into the next chapters, if I don't edit this chapter back to its original angsty-Harry-ness! :)

Thank you SO, SO, SO much! My day = made!!



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