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Review:manno_malfoy says:
Okay, so I remember a few months back when I told you on the forums that I'll be going through your stories. I've only started now, but I'm very happy I finally did!

This first chapter has me very intrigued as to what will happen next. You had Lily think about so many things, yet we didn't get to know what that big scandal is! I was really hoping there'd at least be a clue, but there wasn't. Although I'll probably be going to the next chapter after I finish writing this review, I'm sitting here wondering if I'm going to find out the scandal in the next chapter and if the events will continue from the point they had stopped at here; or if you're going to have us go back in time and have Lily trace out her involvement in this predicament from the very beginning.

I love the idea of the album and the captions, as it does seem as a thing a want-to-be journalist would do for fun. It makes the whole journalist thing reasonable and characteristic.

Though you didn't have Lily interact directly with any characters in this chapter, as all this was in her head, you were still able to show us a bit of her personality without being overbearing with self-introductions. We can tell how much she cares about what her family thinks of her, how dedicated she is to the things she loves, how she always tries her best to not disappoint. I really like all of that!

I also must congratulate you for deciding to write a story that is humor! I could never take such a step myself.

Anyway, I'm going to read on! But marvelous job! I'm enjoying myself so far!

-Manno

Author's Response: Um, wow, thank you so so much for this review. I'm flattered right now. Gahh, you people are all too good to me!

Lily+Self Pity+Drama=MYSTERY. At least, that's what I did in my head :P She really is quite pathetic in this chapter, to be honest. She's a bit of a drama queen. Hmm...now I'm trying to think if there is a clue or not...Well, there isn't in this chapter, but there is one in the next chapter. Promise. The events will go back to the very beginning after this. How it all started.

Yeah, I definitely wanted her to get an early start on the whole journalism thing. She's very stubborn, so I figured it would be good to have her know what she ws doing from an early age.

I was originally going to have the second chapter of this be the first, but I was talking to some other people who told me of the horrors of too much introduction in the first chapter, so I switched to this. I'm glad her personality came though though. Yes, she does care a lot about what other people think.

Once again, MAJOR thank you for the review! It was such a lovely surprise. You're like, my new favorite person for taking the time to leave such an amazing review!

-Naida


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