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Review:Deltaris says:
This is definitely very different than most fics. The direction is interesting, and this was a great introductory chapter.

I feel like there could've been a little more background, though. For instance, how did the muggles find out, when did they decide to join the fight, how have the Death Eaters gained such strong numbers so quickly. Forgive me if I misunderstood the timeline, but if Voldemort fell a month ago, it seems (to me) that more time would've been necessary for such a huge movement. Especially if the Order is down to only holding ground around Godric's Hollow. More background would make it more believable, although it doesn't seem unrealistic now.

Your grammar and sentence structure is fantastic. I didn't notice any errors, besides a forgotten period here: "there were those that supported evilness, though[.]"

I think this is a really good set up for an intense, chaotic war story. I look forward to seeing where this goes :)

Del<3

Author's Response: Huh. That's a good point. I guess it's so clear in my head I just assume everyone knows what's going through my head. I think I'll start woeking on a prequel short story after I finish this one that'll start at the Battle of Hogwarts and go until the setting up of HQ in Godric's Hollow!

Thanks for reviewing!


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