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Review:NaidatheRavenclaw says:
Hello! Here with your challenge reviews :)

I really wanted to read this one shot because of the quote, really. That's one of my favorite Doctor Who quotes and I wanted to see the way you incorporated it into the story. I also love James/Lily (though unrequited Snape/Lily is lovely as well) and I think you did pull off both their characters perfectly. Definitely one of my favorite James/Lily one shots.

One of my favorite parts of this is how it was written from James's point of view. The story always seems to be in the PoV of the girl. I guess, at least for me, it's harder to get into the head of a guy, but you've done that really well here. His thoughts weren't overly gushy, and his proclamations of love were more direct. Most guys aren't going to describe the girl like they were writing a poem, yet they do in a lot of stories. Here, James seems /normal/ and that's really important.

I also love how all the worrying and the heavier parts were offset by humor. The seating chart was hilarious. "Well, I suppose itíll be okay, as long as you donít put her next to me. I donít want things to be awkward between us after all of those long, secluded detentions." That line was my favorite in the story. I also liked it because it made James seem more like the easy going Marauder. I think people sometimes get caught up in fluff and forget that James is a Marauder. He would say things like that.

And the DW quote was integrated perfectly. I really liked that part in general. Of course he was fighting for Lily. Of course he believes in her. I think that part was more adorable than any amount of actual fluff.

An excellent one shot! I'm so glad I get to read so much of your work :D

-Naida

Author's Response: Hey! I appreciate you coming by :)

I also love that quote, and so I was super excited when I got it for the challenge. As you can see by the author's note, I really don't love James/Lily, so this was kind of tricky and fun for me to experiment with. (Naturally, I couldn't resist throwing Snily in there, even if it had to be unrequited in this case.)

You know, I've gotten that comment a lot, and I was a little surprised to hear that most people only use Lily's perspective. I love Lily so much, but James was interesting, and trying to get into his head was easily the most challenging and interesting part of doing this. I definitely wanted to make him seem real, and I agree that I can't see him reciting poetry to Lily. He's still a Marauder, after all.

Yes, haha, that was one of my favorite parts. Again, like you said, he's a Marauder, so I could only make him so fluffy. But I also wanted to include the war and the gravity associated with that, and it's good that you felt like the two were intermingled well.

Oh, good, the romance came out well. Since I don't ship Jily for the most part, I was trying to figure out what Lily could have seen in James that would make her change her mind about him, and this sort of real, deep devotion stuck out to me when I received the quote. In spite of all his flaws, James is a good person on the inside, and he's got his heart in the right place. That's what I figured she saw.

Thanks so much for your very kind review! :)

-Amanda


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