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Review:long_live_luna_bellatrix says:
This was an accurate depiction of after the battle, I think. You really captured Harry's guilt here, and in the sort of way that reader was going, "What, of course we don't blame him!" while he was absolutely beside himself. Well done there. I think you understand him well.

One part you could perhaps work on is the dialogue. People don't generally break into long speeches like McGonagall does here; for the most part, they speak in a sentence or two at a time, with pauses or people interrupting them or distractions. She, however, had several long parts which may have sounded better broken up. The way you have it now is a bit stiff and formal on the ears.

Overall, nicely done. It was an enjoyable, rather hopeful read.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Good advice with the dialogue, that's very true. I think I'll edit that at some point. And I guess I treated this whole thing as an exercise at really getting an understanding of a character, so the fact that you wrote what you did just made me feel pretty awesome. :) Thank you!

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