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Review:Roots in Water says:
Oooh- another great chapter! I really enjoy the way you're telling this story, incorporating her memories with the present in a meaningful way. It makes the story's emotions very present and so much more vibrant. This was especially done to great effect in this chapter when you created the parallel between the two events in her life.

It's very interesting to read about their sisterly bond because we know what will happen, we know what they will become, and yet they were once something else entirely. It was especially interesting to watch Narcissa and Andromeda interact in this chapter because it was the moment before Andromeda left to be with Ted. I liked how you didn't have Andromeda eager to get away, how she still valued her family (she just valued Ted a little more)- it made her decision to run away just that much more powerful.

By the way, I think you meant to have this part "For a moment, as the two of them stood there, ... and so she would." in italics as well - it seemed to be a part of the flashback.

Finally, I think that you did a great job with their interaction in this chapter. It was very realistic and I'm glad that there's the possibility of a new beginning in their relationship.

I'm very interested to see where you go with this and look forward to your next update!

Author's Response: Thanks! I really wanted to kinda merge the two - particularly in this chapter - because the past influences the present so much, you know, and the smallest things can remind you of other events which you thought you'd forgotten about.

I've kinda been waiting to put this moment in ever since the beginning. It is really the most important moment in Andromeda's life and I knew it was going to have to go in somewhere, so voila! :D Personally, I've never imagined Andromeda to hate her family that much when she's a kid - I mean, she grew up with them, there must have been some kind of connection! - so that's sort of where her whole naivity and innocent thing came from, I suppose. I'm glad you like it, though - I know a lot of stories portray it differently.

Ooh, maybe! I'll go back and check and try and make it clearer if it's not meant to be. Thanks for pointing it out!

Thanks so much for the lovely review! And sorry for the really late response!
Aph xx

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