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Review:Livi_777 says:
Hi! I'm here for the BvB review battle!
I must say, I've never been a fan of stories about Voldemort's kids, but you interpret the idea in a very interesting way and I lthink the way you characterise your Tom Riddle III is quite realistic.
Two things to improve on:
One's just grammatical; make sure you don't repeat words twice in the same sentence. In the second sentence, you refer to the metal chair twice, and I notice that Crouch 'commands' Riddle twice in the same paragrah.
The second is dialogue, it's mostly all good but there are little bits that you could improve on. Try reading it allowed and deciding whether you would actually hear someone say that.
Overall it was a great effort though, and a really gripping start to what I'm sure is a wonderful story!

Author's Response: Thanks for the reviewe I'll try and go over it and fix the little grammar mishaps :)

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