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Review:Aphoride says:
I'm here! I'm here! I'm late - but I'm here! :D

Ah, I loved this! I love how the plot is coming along slowly but it's subtle - with Garrett Brandon and his mysteriousness (it is a word. I say it is :P) and now with the sign above the Broomie... things are happening! You're showing a war, bringing the feeling of a war to the story without describing pitched battle scenes in the middle of Hogsmeade or anything, which is great. (I'm actually kinda jealous, lol).

Bella's personality is really coming along - her friendship with Molly, despite an obvious age difference between them, is just lovely. The scene flows so well and I could literally see it happening in my head as I read it. And I definitely agree - weird sayings and a pretty dress make EVERYTHING better :D

Ah, you mentioned her elusive family! I'm almost hoping her sister does come over anyway, despite the war and everything going on, because I get the feeling that they're really different people and the interaction would be interesting. It was good to hear more about her family, as well, and about her dad - even if we don't know why he was killed or how, we can guess it was by the Death Eaters.

I love Aberforth! He's so worried about Bella - it's like she's his surrogate Ariana (kinda... not totally, of course, but... oh, you know what I mean!) - and it's just such a lovely, lovely relationship between the two of them. Her confusion was so natural, as well, seeing as she had no idea what had happened and so no idea why he was acting like that. I'm sure most people would have reacted similarly in the same situation.

I'm curious as to what she's 'too late' for and I really, really hope the mysterious Garrett Brandon returns soon :P

Keep going! :D

Aph xx

Author's Response: Aph! Never fear about lateness! (This reply is late enough-but I told you in our PM why :P). And I was late reviewing Seeing Double so we're even stevens. (Where does that phrase even come from? It doesn't even make sense...)

But, yeah. Thank you!

Mysteriousness is a word...I think... *grabs dictionary, but doesn't actually cos I hate dictionaries and take years to find a word*

N'aww, don't be jealous! There are so many edits and changes I need to make, I can't even begin.

Don't you worry! I think Bella's sister will definitely make an appearance at some point :P

The ABerforth-Bella relationship is very brother-sister based, definitely! I love that. Too much romance in a story can kill it sometimes. And I don't know..the plot's a little muddled in my mind ta the moment so I think I'm gonna need a while to straighten things out and stuff.

Thanks for the review-I will keep going!
Annon xx

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