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Review:charlottetrips says:
You basically took the saddest scene in all the books and extended it and made it even more sadder and poignant for me.

How could you do that?

And how could you make it even better than what I already had?

I loved how you took small moments from Sev's memories, ones we didn't get to glimpse and integrated it with his death and how he really did do everything he could for Lily, as much as he could, and how he loved her to her end and to his. Capitalizing "Her" and not having him take her name in vain shows the regard he has for her, that he places her in the status of Goddess over him. This is like how Jews don't speak their God's name and as Christians and the like capitalize "He" in reference to their deity. It was subtle but effective.

The years of longing had perfected her image, removing the little blemishes and making her into a goddess. - This is also so true. There were many years where he and Lily no longer spoke or had much interaction and he had time to wipe away any flaws. Absence does make the heart grow fonder, I have personal experience with that and I find myself doing what Sev does here.

I also liked how you kept up the running dislike/like that Severus has for Harry. It's mainly dislike due to Harry's looks (aside from his eyes) and his perceived arrogance. You had very choice lines in here that kept Snape the character we knew from Harry's POV for so long and also introduced this new aspect to him we started to know in this part of the story.

It separated her from her hateful son, who carried his fatherís image, but held his motherís heart.
Those eyes. He could not forget the first time he had seen them, in the Great Hall. Her eyes staring out the face of James Potter. It was hideous, a genetic disaster, it repulsed him. Hatred for the boy had taken root within him, and he made no secret of it.


All in all, this was a beautifully rendered scene.

xChar

Author's Response: Wow, this review! Thank you very much for reading and reviewing this story, and I can't express how wonderful it is to hear that this story was so moving. After reading that scene in DH, I thought that it was tragic and surprising, but I still needed more - there were still questions about Snape's perspective and his use of Harry as an image of Lily. It was a fascinating moment that opened up so much potential for a story. It means a lot that you see this one-shot as an effective extension of that scene in the book - it was what I really hoped for, but never thought I could actually do.

Snape's memories in "The Prince's Tale" only show the most relevant ones, those that provide Harry with the necessary information to understand both his sacrifice and Snape's motives throughout the years, so I added in one that I thought would be of importance to Snape and another directly relating to the next step he must take: death.

I'm really glad that you liked the use of the capitalized "Her" - you've hit the nail on the head with your comments on that. Rather than having him gush about Lily as a goddess, the use of that capitalized pronoun is recognizably significant without the gushy aspects. I think of Snape as subtle, shadowy, showing emotion only under great duress, yet he harbours this incredible love - not a passion, but intense care and adoration - for Lily that's always growing until it takes over everything he does. It's amazing.

Thank you again for reading and reviewing this story! ^_^


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