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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello again. I'm back for the new chapter!

It definitely seems like three steps forward, two steps back for poor Pansy. Each time she seems to be making progress on getting past her issues, she has a setback.

The difficulty she has in writing the letter was puzzling to me, and I'm trying to figure out exactly what I should take away from it. It's possible that she's simply out of practice, not having anyone in particular to write to. It's also possible that her hands are shaking due to her emotional state. Or it could be that her obsession with neatness is causing her to make far too much of very small errors in her script. Or some combination of the above. Regardless, she struggles with what seems like it should be a rather simple task.

Then she has the conversation with her reflection. Once again, unless somebody has slipped an enchanted mirror into her chamber, this can't be a good sign. Her reflection seems to have gotten devious and manipulative, albeit not for anything especially dangerous to her. I really loved the dialog here. Once again, it left me feeling really bad for Pansy.

The trip to Diagon Alley ended on such an interesting note. Who is the mysterious stranger? A new love interest, perhaps? The brief look you give us into his thoughts suggests that he's more than just a random stranger.

The only thing I noticed in this chapter that seemed a bit jarring was the sudden shift into the mystery wizard's point of view at the end. Maybe I'm just not used to this story coming from any narrative voice other than Pansy, but it struck me as odd. Aside from that, I would have liked it if you'd kept going with her visit to Gringott's, but I always wish your chapters were longer because I life them.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing once again!

I had her struggle while writing the letter because (to me at least) she was under a lot of emotional stress at the time. She's very near to completing the first step in her plan and, quite naturally, she's very excited and anxious about what's to come. I felt that, after so much time alone, she wouldn't be quite as practiced in controlling her emotions and so some of it would spill out into her actions.

I'm glad that you liked the dialogue between Pansy and her reflection- I always find those scenes very interesting to write because she's essentially having a conversation with herself, only not quite.

Though I can't tell you who the stranger is quite yet, I can say that he will play a larger role in the story as it progresses. He won't be back for another couple of chapters, though.

Thanks for pointing that out- I didn't even realize that I had slipped from Pansy's thoughts. I'll see what I can do to ease the transition. Her visit with Gringotts is in the next chapter- the scene is rather long, so I decided to include it in the next chapter rather than making this chapter so much longer than the others. I'm very glad that you enjoy my story!

Thanks once again for your thoughtful reviews!


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