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Review:Roots in Water says:
It's Roots in Water here with your review!

What a coincidence! I'm currently writing a story about Pansy too, though it's a novella, not a one-shot.

I think that you did a great job with this story. In particular, I enjoyed the way you alternated between the past and the present- you had a clear pattern and it was quite easy to follow, but the memories/flashbacks made Daphne's feelings for Pansy come alive. In fact, without those memories the story wouldn't have been nearly so believable.

As well, I think that you did a good job with your characterization. You brought Pansy to life while still giving her the traits we know from the books. I liked how you had their relationship centered, for the most part, around Pansy's pursuit of Draco, with Daphne's commentary on her admiration of Pansy. Daphne herself was very nice- you made her devotion to Pansy very clear.

Furthermore, I liked the parallels you drew between the years- the trips to Hogsmeade and the Acid Pops/Chocolate Frogs. It helped to give life to their friendship because they had patterns that they followed, month after month, year after year.

Finally I enjoyed your description. Once again you've managed to create vivid scenary and sharp images that can be pictured easily by readers. Even better, you didn't go overboard with the description, giving the story a lighter air that made it a very pleasant read. As well, the ending was very cute and fit perfectly with the theme of the story. It was very fitting that Daphne had been planning to date Pansy for years.

All in all, I really enjoyed this one-shot and I think that you did a great job with the characters. I'd never really given a thought to a romantic relationship between Pansy and Daphne before but you made it work! Thanks for requesting a review and I hope my comments are helpful!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for coming by! :)

I think Pansy is really interesting and underloved by most people. I've really been meaning to come by and check out your Pansy story.

I'm very glad that the flashbacks worked for you. I had gotten a comment that they were too confusing, and I was a bit worried about them, but it's good to know that not everyone was thrown off by the time jumps.

I really wanted to focus on Pansy's loss of Draco, because I felt like it would be a huge deal to her. I never liked her much in canon, but I did kind of feel bad for her when I found out that Draco didn't end up with her, and I wondered what had happened, because they had always seemed to be so close in school. So this piece was kind of my way of exploring that and also having some fun with femmeslash.

It's great that you liked the patterns. I thought they would be kind of fun and whimsical, and I think writing third year Pansy and Daphne was my favorite, with them finding a secret place and stealing from the kitchens.

It's good that the story didn't feel too heavy and that you felt like I included the right amount of description. The ending was fun to write, and I would like to think that Daphne and Pansy had a wonderful first date.

Thanks very much for your kind review! :)

-Amanda


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