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Review:magnolia_magic says:
Hi! Maggie here with your review!

Wow, this is just beautiful. I love the vibrant imagery you use and the lyrical prose. You've got some gorgeous lines in here! I couldn't list them all if I tried, but my favorite is at the very beginning: "...lungs starving for air not fouled by death and decay."

I like what you've done with Severus. He seems much more mellow in this story than I normally see him, which makes sense because he's in the afterlife. But his personality is still there; things like his angry reaction when James is mentioned, his resentment toward Harry in the flashback, and his reverence toward Lily all seem very true to his character. And Lily is just like how I would imagine her. She's beautiful, gentle, and honest even when it might hurt.

I'm having to work really hard to find concrit to give here! The only thing I could mention is that the James/Sirius thing seems almost too convenient (if that makes sense). But then again, this is a companion story to something I've never read, so that's probably why that pairing seems out of the blue.

I love this piece! It's gorgeous and it flows effortlessly. As a Snape/Lily shipper myself, I especially enjoyed seeing the two of them have a happy, peaceful ending. Great job!

--Maggie

Author's Response: Hi Maggie,

Thank you so much. The imagery was an important aspect for me and I really wanted readers to get an idea of what Snape was envisioning in his afterlife. It's meant to be a bit ethereal and I hope that came across.

Snape is a character I haven't ever written so it was interesting to write this from his POV. His adoration for Lily was sweet and it was nice to be able to give him this redemption in the afterlife after everything he had done in life.

Haha, if you read the James/Sirius fic then perhaps you'd think the Snape/Lily pairing was convenient. I think it wouldn't seem as out of place if you did read the companion pieces, though.

As a Snily shipper, I'm glad you liked my attempt at this ship. I'm a James/Lily shipper myself so this interesting.

I'm all about happy endings myself so I'm glad to have written this.

Thank you for your sweet review. :)


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