Hello! I'm stalking your page because I'm determined to get to 480 reviews tonight, and I was going to read one of your longer stories but I decided to wait for their respective months, so I'm going to review all your one shots instead :D
Plus I love this banner. Couldn't stay away ;)
But as for the story, you have completely outdone yourself. Wow. I read it twice, because it was amazing. Truth be told, I really don't like reading about self harm and all that, not even in published novels, but the way you wrote this made it bearable for me. Not just bearable, but enjoyable, if it is possible to enjoy a story about something so sad. I've found self harm to be depicted in a gruesome way in the past, even glorifies, but you did it made it so subtle. You took a really serious issue and made someone who stays away from that really enjoy it. And somehow, you made it seem all the more serious and important by doing that.
And then the way you wrote it was gorgeous. I love the way you mixed second person with third person. The second person was so effective in this story because it felt like it was happening to me. You really put me in Lucy's shoes, which is what second person is so effective at doing if you can pull it off, and that made the entire thing feel that much more personal. And the memories in third person just tied the whole thing together. I love how all the actual self harm parts were in flashback format. The format of all that was just so perfect.
The beginning part, I think, was actually the saddest part of the entire story. To be that young and say "I like when it hurts" is so...I don't really know how to describe it. I would say it's sick, but it really isn't. I think that most all of us have pushed on a bruise to make it hurt. No, it's more just a part of human nature. It's something we all explore. But it set up the rest of the story perfectly.
And the end, wow. I was half expecting a really sad ending, but I'm so glad it got better for her. You showed that it doesn't always end badly. That there can be happy endings. And the remnant of the one scar-that imagery was stunning.
Probably my favorite one shot on your page. Beautiful.
Author's Response: I'm just casually scrolling down my page seeing if there have been anymore reviews, then I'm like 'oh theres a new review here' and then I find out that you've gone on a MAD REVIEW CRAWL and now I'm utterly amazed by your mad-reviewing-skills and unsure of which order I should answer them in
(this, my friend, is response number TWO).
This is the closest writing I've ever done to myself. Ah, this is when it becomes slightly autobiographical for me, so I was pretty nervous about putting this up. But I'm really glad I did.
Plus, I couldn't resist the banner. It was too prettyyy.
See, I love writing about self harm. That sounds morbid and a little grim, but its true. It something that I care a lot about but, also, it's the damnest thing because you don't want to condem it or glorify it because that's not going to help someone who's struggling with it. So working out my angle took a little while.
I've come to really enjoying mixing up tenses and POV in one-shots. I think it's something that I might make my trademark, although I do want to go back and edit the formating in this because I think there's too much ittalics and what not. But, I loved the second person, but I loved writing the third person. I don't know, I like messing around with thoes things.
Wait, did I put the oven timmer on? Oh, crap. That's one burnt pizza. I always do his. whooppps.
That was an idiotic thing to say, it's not like you're going to know I went and got my pizza out of the oven. Oh dear.
Ah, the beginning part stems from my sister talking about how she used to slam doors on her fingers when she was a toddler. I don't know, I think there's something awfully innocent about having a facination in pain when you're young. Human nature, yeah. And how something simple and harmless just sort of... takes over.
Eeee, I mean. The scar is, well, actualyl I won't go there. But thank you for such a lovely review!