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Review:justonemorefic says:
Ah! The description of that chair is so scary, and it's something I could imagine the wizards using, what with their archaic devices. You mention 'metal chair' twice in the second sentence. Did you mean to do that? :)

Tom seems to be a very articulate young boy, and I can see traces of his no doubt grim upbringing. I see a lot of potential in a character like him, someone who was brought up with not too great of a moral code, but a victim. I think his voice could have a little more of his personality in it, just so it's not so stiff like he's saying a speech.

I spotted a few misspellings, 'torchers' shoudl be 'torture' and 'everyword' should be 'every word'.

The Dark Lord was also known to be quite charismatic and look what happened when we let him run wild. I like that they address this, because the little Tom does have those traces of ol' Riddle. And I also very much like Dumbledore's defense. It sounds very much like him! His reasoning, especially.

I think a bit of Barty and Tom's dialogue could be reworded a little bit, but otherwise, good first chapter! :) Sounds like it's going to be an interesting set of novels.

Author's Response: Thanks a bunch for the review. For the first question I did mean to use metal chair twice for emphasis. The personality will come with the later chapters. This chapter was all about introducing him and in a way he was giving a speech when he spoke because he was talking to an audience about his life. I've gone back and reworded some of the dialouge so that its hopefully a little less awkward. Thanks again for the review

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