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Review:adluvshp says:
I am here for the slytherin tag :-)

This was a nice story, I liked your plot. Your characterization of Dominique was good, though I would have liked more insight into lysander's character and their relationship. You had some grammar and spelling errors so i suggest re-reading and editing your mistakes, or getting this proof read by a beta :-) The narrative was a little rushed in my opinion, you could have gone into more description of the scene, the surroundings, the characters, and most importantly their feelings - especially lysander's.
However, despite everything, it made a nice sort-of-realistic read and I liked it.

I give you a 8.5/10 as this is good writing that can surely improve! :-)

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Green with envy 2012!

Author's Response: Hi there!

Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing!

Your advice concerning description and feelings was really helpful, as soon as I have some spare-time I'll edit it and add some more detail here and there.

I'm glad that you liked it :)

Miriel

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