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Review:Roots in Water says:
It's Roots in Water here with your review!

I really enjoyed this story and I think that you did a fantastic job with both this continuation of A Cold Heaven and with the description of the beginning of their new relationship.

To begin, I absolutely loved the section of the story where you described his death. You did a brilliant job of describing why he wanted Harry to look at him and I liked the brief flash of memory that you used to describe both her eyes and their former relationship.

As well, I think that you did a great with his characterization. He probably wouldn't have been the angry, bitter man that he had become in the prescence of Lily and you allowed his better qualities to shine through. Furthermore, you highlighted his pure feelings for her without overwhelming the reader with repetition.

I liked the way in which you explained the fallout after the incident in fifth year- though Severus obviously regretted it, it makes sense that Lily would be the one to realize the value in what had happened between them, in the good things that had come out of that exchange. It was also really sweet how all it took for the issue to be resolved was forgiveness, instead of a long, drawn-out resentment on either of their parts.

The final sentence was very well done- it more than anything showed the permanence of the change in their relationship and opened the door to their future. It was the perfect ending to a story about forgiving and new beginnings.

All in all I think that you did a great job with this one-shot and it definitely doesn't show that it was your first time writing Severus! Your description was beautiful and the characterization very well done. Thanks for requesting a review!

Author's Response: Hi, I am so sorry for the delay in responding to your review. There is no excuse. :(

It's great to have a reader who has read both ACH and LWP and knows where this fic is coming from.

I really enjoyed writing Snape's death scene (yes, that sounds morbid, but it was really interesting to go back to my stylistic roots a bit there). Yes, he felt grounded looking into Harry's eyes for a moment, though maybe not slightly sane, maybe he really thought he was looking at Lily.

I was worried about writing Snape and I really did not want him to seem too sappy. So I'm pleased his characterization worked well for you.

I didn't want her to totally discredit her relationship with James, at all. She obviously loved him - she built a life with him, a family. Sometimes, though, we realize that there's more out there for us, and I imagine if Lily's spent years in the afterlife having time to contemplate everything, she'd come to that sort of conclusion.

As I'm sure you know from ACH, forgiveness is a huge part of the afterlife, so I was glad to give them that.

I love that ending too so I'm happy you liked it. :)

Thank you so much for your kind review. Again, I am so unbelievably sorry as to how long it's taken me to finally respond. You're the best!


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