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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Another great chapter! The scene with Riddle at the end had me glued to the screen because the tension between the characters was fantastically realized. They definitely are intellectually matched, though I have to agree with Minerva that being the favourite of Dumbledore is far more meaningful than being the favourite of Slughorn. You've written Riddle very well - his odd presence gave me the chills, as though just by being there, he sent the temperature of the room plummeting.

It feels like Minerva gave Walter the brush-off when they entered the party. I wonder what's going on there - he obviously has a crush on her, but is too shy or polite to say anything, and she's just too distracted by the millions of things going on in her life to notice. It makes me feel a little sorry for him, but he is, like she said, very uncomplicated, almost boring. He's quite a contrast, not just to Riddle or Tristan, but also to Peter, who is very much the one for her. It's interesting how she's surrounded by these wizards - it makes her push harder to have her voice heard and her actions acknowledged. The world you've constructed here is very limiting for witches, and she stands out as one who will fight to the very end to do as she wishes. It sets this story apart from other Minerva-centered stories I've read and adds a further layer of complexity to your plot and character development.

There are a few typos riddled throughout - for instance, "steel" instead of "steal" - so you should look out for those. Otherwise, fantastic work! I look forward to seeing what happens next and how Minerva will deal with everything that's going on. :D

Author's Response: The first time I wrote the scene with Riddle in he came off really really camp, it's not even funny. I actually still have a PM about it on the forums (me begging for help) and I've kept it due to the wondeful name... so I'm glad that I managed to get rid of that before this got posted. Chills and temperatre is exactly what I was intending (rather than campness) so that's a good thing. Thank you :)

Minerva probably wouldn't notice even if he did say something, but I like Walter and I think he's sweet if not complicated enough for good old Minnie. I found it difficult not to see Minnie as a bit of a feminist. At first I was trying to juggle dates and stuff to see whether it would be realistic for there not to be the same Quidditch opportunities and stuff, but, I don't know... I really think she's just a hell of a woman in canon and I can imagine her being just as strong in her teenage years.

The typos don't surprise me, as I spend all this time working towards a perfect chapter and then when the queues cleared I tend to think that a fast update is better than a perfect update, and that I'll edit later... then I rarely do. Bad habbit.

Thanks for the lovely review :)


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