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Review:SilentConfession says:
Hi! I'm here for my end of the TGS review exchange! :D

For starters, I really liked this piece. I'm not a huge nextgen reader and I don't particularly like Teddy/Victoire. So I was pleasantly surprised that when I finished reading this I actually found myself liking them, so I suppose a thank you is in order. I think. =D

I really loved how you began this story. In the mind of an 11 year old and i feel like you captured that mind frame beautifully. Many authors sort of skip the mind frame and write it as if it was an older person speaking. But i love how it really reflected her own maturity and how that progressed as the story went on.

I've always really liked how narrative take this snapshot look at life and i think you did a lovely job choosing those moments that really helped define their relationship. I also liked that small moment of canon and how that moment seemed to be a huge moment of change for this shy girl. I never really imagined Victoire as you've written her but it's so refreshing to see her written this way and I think she fits perfectly with Teddy.

It was interesting take on Teddy as well, thinking that it might be a sin and perhaps it could have invaded him as well. I think that was my favourite bit, that and his eyes that changed with his moods. I liked the idea of his emotions being so open and how easily Victoire could read him and quiet his insecurities. You've made them seem like the perfect pair because they both know what it's like to have lycanthropy in the family (well, not fully, Bill obviously just got his scars) but not that many authors highlight that similarity and i think it's that that makes them work so well together.

Also, the fact that this very short one-shot spanned many years and i never felt like you were going too fast or skipping over anything important. It just flowed so well together and each moment just seemed to come naturally after the last. I've very jealous of the style here and this is honestly a very lovely take on this pairing. Great job, i enjoyed reading this immensely!

Author's Response: Hello! Thank you for coming by! :)

I'll take a thank you! Err -- thank you and you're welcome? Haha. I'm also not particularly inclined toward next gen, but I couldn't ignore this plunny, and I think the pairing is sweet.

It's nice to hear that the voice worked well. It was tough to write like an eleven-year-old, but I'm glad that I pulled it off for you!

I love that you found my portrayal of Victoire refreshing and could appreciate the way I tried to weave a moment from canon in with moments that might "fill in the gaps" in her life, as I've imagined it. I agree that we don't usually see her as shy, but I felt like she would work better with Teddy that way, and I definitely wanted to try something new. I'm also pleased that you could appreciate Teddy's vulnerability. He was tough, but I felt like a kid who lost his parents might be a little sensitive and complicated, and I tried to map it out from that mindset.

Finally, it's lovely that the flow and style worked for you. I was a little worried that it would be too "skippy", but that doesn't seem to be the case, which is wonderful!

Thanks so much for your awesome review :)

-Amanda

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