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Review:Aderyn says:
Hello!

I was glad to see that you updated, as I really enjoy this story.

This update certainly isn't awful! I thought the scene with Hannah's father was very touching. And I'm glad, for her sake, that he is alive, even if he's not doing so well.

I like your description at the beginning of the chapter. Those first few paragraphs did a great job of setting the mood. Hannah is frantic with hope and worry and you do a good job showing that mix of emotions. :)

The last lines of the chapter, too, had emotional impact. It's nice to see Hannah finally realizing how much her life has changed for the better in the past months. Acknowledging her healing really shows her progress.

Nice job, and I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Hi!

Thank you. I'm so glad people are still interested in this. Writer's block is so hard to deal with on these longer stories and I'm not quite out of it yet but hopefully I'll be able to get another couple of chapters up in April. No promises, though.

I think she needed something happy in her life (along with everything else). Killing him off would have taken her right back into herself and I didn't want that. I want this to remain relatively short. Hopefully 20 chapters.

I really like the start too - I wrote that before I had these issues with writing that have cropped up lately and the rest I'm not too keen on. I wanted to build up the suspense a bit in the first hundred words or so.

I'm so glad you can see that she's made progress because I always worry whether that comes across. It's obvious to me, of course, but whether it is in the writing I don't know.

Thank you so much for such a lovely review! I promise to try and update soon.

Thank you!


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