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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
I've had my eye on this story for a while, and I'm sorry that I haven't gotten to it until now. Stories about McGonagall are always a treat, especially by authors with your reputation, and it was a stroke of good luck that I got your story for the TGS review exchange. Finally a shove in the right direction! :D

And this story does not disappoint. You portray Minerva in a way I haven't yet seen her - it's refreshing to give her this deep connection with the Muggle world, not to mention making her less inclined toward study and unhappy in Scotland. She's very realistically written - she comes alive, feeling fully developed from the beginning.

Stylistically, I really liked the way that you integrated the letters into the story, especially her letter - your exposition is artfully and tastefully included, literally fitting "between the lines" of her letter. Surprisingly, though, I liked Peter's letter too - he's much better at writing them and describing his feelings whereas Minerva keeps a lot to herself, which your narration fills in for readers (if not for Jane).

There were two lines that could be edited to smooth things out:

Then she’d walk down to the Anderson shelter at the Anderson’s - the name is unnecessarily repeated.

They couldn’t understand just how they managed to live with the convenience of magic - do you mean "without the convenience of magic"? I may be misinterpreting what you mean with the line, though.

Otherwise, great work with this story! I look forward to reading on and seeing what happens when she really does break the rules. It's a great way of fitting your plot into JKR's hinted backstory and I'm excited to see how you'll develop it. :D

Author's Response: THe beginning of this review sort of made me trip over my words for a couple of minutes, because I was utterly startled that someone like /you/ (who, in my head, is a member of the elite writers club who all write clever, amazing hings) wanted to read it and then... reputation. Then I squeed for a little bit in a darkened room. But I'm so glad you got this story!

I really liked writing Minerva. As a bit of canon-phobe (Ocs are my friends), I thought she'd be really difficult but then she came alive in my head and, well, I'm glad it came out that way too :D

Whooops, yeah I meant 'without' in that line. I'll go back and edit those at some point. Actually, quit being Lazy AC, I'll go do it now.

Thank you for this lovely review and I hope the next couple of chapters don't dissapoint! :)

AC


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