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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
This story has a fantastic idea behind it, and the way that you've shown Rose as a ghost is really well-done. I love how she finally finds a way to communicate, especially to Lily, as they were so close as cousins and friends, even as surrogate sisters, seeing that both only had brothers. There's a deep connection between them, and that isn't always the case in next-gen stories, so I was very glad to see it so well played out here.

It's not often that one gets to read from the point of view of a ghost, even in fanfiction, but especially not in next-gen stories. What stands out to me is that you don't go into detail about Rose's death - the hows and whys. It doesn't at all matter what happened, only that she's dead and has remained because she still connected to her family; she loves them that much. At first, I thought she was in some version of the afterlife just like the way that Harry found himself in King's Cross. But the dream-like qualities of Rose's descriptions instead reflected her ghostliness, and I liked that better, actually.

The one thing that this story lacks, though, is emotion. She's dreamy and distant, in an appropriately spectral sense, but she doesn't seem upset enough - she's too distant, almost clinical. One main example is when she states so simply that her parents wouldn't get to see their own daughter walk down the aisle like that - that should be a breaking point for Rose, but instead she passes over that comment without any feeling behind it. Maybe it's just part of her personality, but I think that adding more emotion to this story would give it more depth. It's got the potential to be incredibly moving with it's combination of humour and drama.

Otherwise, great work with this story! It's very creative and I'm glad that I got the chance to read it. :D

Author's Response: I am really glad that you liked this one, because it is probably my favorite of my own stories especially to write. Surprisingly I didn't really know who was the main character was until I wrote her name halfway through the story. (it was between Lily and Rose to be honest) But once I established them it was easier to develop from there.
I had initially just started writing it for a challenge, but I decided not to make it so much about her death, but her 'life' after death because it seemed at least a bit more interesting.
I think maybe she doesn't show so much emotion because being dead that part of her had passed on, mostly because she can't do much about it. It might also be her personality amplified... I'm not sure lol.
Thank you so much for reviewing! It means a lot. :D

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