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Review:charlottetrips says:
Hi, it’s Char from the Forums here with your review! :)

I just have to say that I LOVE 2nd Person POV! It’s really such an interesting way to read a story and it’s an effective way of drawing the reader in if you do it right. I know that there are some people who are like “Ugh, 2nd Person POV” but not me! I’m all “Yeah!”

I’m loving everything so far. The snippets of a life, the bitterness and poetic soul that leaks through is wonderful to behold. Remus’ survivor guilt is evident and his longing is clear in the words.

I did get confused a little with this “Twelve years of hatred and then two of love”. Are we still talking about Remus and Sirius? There was no mention on hatred unless you are talking about when Sirius was thought to be a murderer and then Remus hating him for that time and then finding out he was OK and being happy about him. I think I just worked it out. :P

life [seeking] out of you in deep gushes of air - [seeping] would seem more the appropriate word

The moon and you are two elements merged together in a perfect union, never one without the other. - Wonderful. Loved this line. And then later how you compare Sirius to the moon and how the pull is the same for him as it is for the moon, that was a brilliant comparison to draw!

James. Awkward but good James. I loved how you portrayed him here.

OMG. The ending. The rush of words, Remus’ decision to die there and how he saw what he was doing as selfish rather than noble, it was beautifully done. How he’s affected by Tonks’ death though he wasn’t in love with her like he was with Sirius, it was just beautifully done.

I’m not a fan of slash but you did it tastefully and with real emotion playing out. I could especially connect with Remus (primarily because it’s from his POV) but I could also get a handle on Sirius’ character—he seemed not as emotionally involved but completely with Remus at the same time. He put out that aura of not needing anyone yet continued to exhibit a need in his actions.

I loved how you wrote this. Your style of writing is unique. The comparisons you draw, the descriptions and the sentence structure is interesting and held my attention throughout the whole story. You told a man’s life and love in just a short span of words and I admire that greatly.

xChar

Author's Response: Hello! Thank you so much for your wonderful review.

I'm glad you got James, I really wanted to portray him as an awkward, slightly off character, but good-natured none the less.

Thank you so much for your wonderful words, I really wanted to show Sirius as he was: haughty, pureblood and dark. And Remus... Guilt-ridden, sad Remus. I'm so happy you understood that.

Thank you so much for your wonderful review!


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